Crack in the Wall
There is a crack in the wall
See?
In the corner!
Its minute fissures have spread like vines
Wanting to grow
Begging me to water them
Will I?
Once there would have been no question
But now–
Well
Life, my friend, is not an easy game to play
Let alone master
But…
That crack is taunting me
Calling me
Pleading
“One easy smash,” it says
“Will shatter the wall to dust”
“And it will be like it never existed–”
Be silent!
Leave me be
Let me stare in silence
At the light peeking through
Maybe the sun will be a kinder persuader or
Better
It will leave me in peace
For it’s hard to justify the crumbling
Of a wall I built
To keep life out
Carol Ann Hoel
This one speaks of genius, Gretchen. I like it! Thank you for sharing.
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thoughtsnotlost
I feel the struggle within the poem, great read!
Jingle
lovely words,
love your version and beautiful sentiments.
Jingle
how nice to have you support at poets Rally,
I am thrilled to have you back…
Glad that you are done already…..
Happy Thursday!
u rock!
here is one of my entries:
http://poetryalltheway.tumblr.com/post/1116122120/becoming-homeless
Bodhirose
Very heartfelt message of protection of our vulnerability–I liked this very much.
http://bodhirose.wordpress.com/2010/09/26/tapping-into-the-source/
buttercup600
I feel the pain there my friend, sending you hugs xxxx so happy you’re here
xx
siubhan
cool analogy with quite a punch at the end. nicely written.
RiikaInfinityy 마왕
life is never easy, we are always struggling and hope that we will make it out someday =), perfect writing.
Sharp Little Pencil
I love this, very insightful. The wall you built to keep others out, yet it longs to be broken through. This is the essence of isolation and the struggle to come into one’s own. I’m really impressed, Gretchen.
Amy BL
Shashi
Wonderful thought of letting something to enter your cocoon… if I may say so… Some times the warmth itself is enought to crack open the strongest of walls.. and i loved the way you have put this in your verse… thanks for sharing..
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com
Artswebshow
i feel the message in this.
Excellent
sillyfrogsusan
The imagery here was outstanding!
I love poems that reflect inner dialogs…this one is perfect.
~Susan
ladynimue
For it’s hard to justify the crumbling
Of a wall I built
To keep life out ..
//
Don’t we love
the walls that grow
never realizing
they cut off
none but you alone
//
just got inspired !!
I enjoyed this poem ..
pollutedpoet
yes…. I love it… a common metaphor but a passionately constructed poem.
megzone
a very heart-touching poem dear…
Im here from Jingle’s rally..
you can read my poem at
http://megzone.wordpress.com/2010/10/07/autumn/
liv2write2day
This is such a great example of a poet being totally alert, aware and taking something they see and creating beauty and truth. Good job.
Leo (Leonnyes)
touching, heartfelt and powerful.. lovely wordplay here.. the last few lines esp.
My Rally Entry is Here!
http://leonnyes.wordpress.com/2010/10/06/night-nuances/
notjeffery
Letting down the walls helps harvest growth.
I like the way you’ve painted the struggle within.
Peace,
http://notjeffery1.worpress.com/2010/10/06/dying-inside/
http://notjeffery1.wordpress.com/2010/10/06/forsooth/
(my entries)
lovelyannie79
This resonates with me…I think of my box I retreat to. Found myself in the scene your painted with your poem, watching the sun through the cracks!
Have wonderful Thursday rally and weekend!
http://www.itslovelyannie.com/2010/10/06/different-rally-week-30/
Jingle
there are more new entries,
if you enjoy reading, do more, which means you get more feedback….
you can submit 2nd or 3rd entry…
thanks!
have fun!
Someone Is Special
This is too good.. Lovely Sentiments..
Fragrance of Friendship
Happy Rally
–Someone Is Special–
fiveloaf
yea- keep the light out!
marisol4you
Very smart in a somewhat psychotic but admirable way lol. Hell! I say don’t give that crack the satisfaction!
http://marisol4you.wordpress.com/2010/10/06/my-view-on-the-seasons/
Kiera
This piece just seemed to flow so well. Great work!
(Also, I love your website name; completely agree with the idea of words tumbling out a mile a minute in their different ways)
Jamie Dedes
Ah, your Rally poem! Great!
Such a fine subject … the inner dialogue is wonderful … well written. I like it!
Panda Wolf
Wow, I loved it! Very clever. :]
Happy Rally.
http://pandaheroes.wordpress.com/2010/10/09/ambivalence/
Naba Kumar Barman
Your poetry abounds in emotions. Being new to poetry, I think I’ve got so much to learn from you. To put into words what one really feels is a great talent! good work.
Please do check out:
http://naba1987.wordpress.com/2010/10/11/the-heartbroke-song/